My piece of writting

First of all please don't pay attention to the title of my post. I was thinking about something else at the moment... looool :P
What I've written is just the begining of my book.
Please I would like you to read my story and let me know what you think of it. You can send me your feedback to my e-mail: tiago_nunes17@hotmail.com
If you have any suggestions let me know.